译海拾珠05

每年，都有大批的外国旅游者来中国观光，中国有许多著名的旅游点，比如长城就是一个有重大历史意义的建筑物，桂林就是一个以不平凡的风景而闻名的地方。

不好译文：Everyday, there are a great number of foreign tourists coming to China to do sightseeing. China has a lot of tourist spots that are famous; for example, the Great Wall is a building having great historical significance, and Guilin is a place known for uncommon scenic beauty.

较好译文:Everyday,a great number of foreign tourists come to China to visit.China has a lot of famous spots; for example, the Great Wall is a structure of great historical significance, and Guilin is a place known for itsuncommon scenic beauty.

讨论：

1.word：

@everyday与every day的区别：

everyday：adj. 定语成分；例如：everyday life日常生活

every day：状语成分；例如：He catlicks his face every day.

@“观光”

sightseeing:偏重看风景，而汉语的“观光”不仅仅指看风景，建议改成visit

@“建筑物”

building:a structure such as a house, church, or factory, that has a roof and walls建筑（物）；楼房，房子，楼宇

structure:something that has been built, especially something large such as a building or a bridge〔尤指大的〕建筑物，结构体

描述长城，后者更佳

2.句子瘦身

@著名的旅游点：

不好译文"tourist spots that are famous"，较好译文改为：famous spots

从句改成形容词，同时去掉“tourist”（因为在具体上下文中，spots一词已经可以表达“旅游点”的概念了）

以上内容整理自《通过翻译学翻译》。

译海拾珠：

旅游点：tourist spot/spot

不平凡的风景：uncommon scenic beauty

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