2019年7月写作直播反馈（二）

自现象级英语

每周一段 043-科幻小说的价值

否定的是 chiefly，表示平行内容，不能是二元对立的完全对错

It is wrong to see sci-fi as chiefly predictive,however. 可理解为It is right to see sci-fi as predictive. But being predictive is not the dominant feature of sci-fi.

例如汉语与英语之间的差异，除了语言的差异，还有文化的、思维的差异 argue改为argument

例如：the argument among the super rich, middle class, and the poor

语言很美

Fairy tales are also enlightening, instructive, and empathetic.

临摹句子的时候，可以写完一句后展开详述一下

Its 改为Their, 用复数realities

TV series 复数，用their代替，reality 用复数 realities

Their fabrication are often indicative of the realities. 

报道可能是celebratory，表达情绪

Below are examples open to debate.

二元对立里的一个概念，而非更多概念中的平行概念

句中的chiefly可以去掉，而且去掉chiefly后意思更清楚。所以造句不妥。

改为It is wrong to see Gaokao as rigid, however.

It is wrong to see medical beauty as chiefly 外貌性的

医美的功能应该是不只是变美，还有其他功能，而非换主语(健康的形态、阅历修养的提升等)

二元对立

Not all of those who wear glasses are knowledgeable.

corrected version
去掉chiefly，二元对立 Corrected version

hedge words: a word or phrase used to avoid overprecise commitment, for example etc., often, sometimes, almost, nearly, or may.

climatic incidents 可用于替代climatic disasters

用简洁的句子来突出核心意思。explictly express明确表达

success改为 succeed jargons改为words

jargon 专业术语，行话(不可数名词) ：subject-specific, discipline-specific

buzzowords 流行语， 新旧的问题

逻辑关系错误

in one concrete way: 批发市场卖得最快的东西价格会越来越高。人们囤积卖得最火的东西。临摹的时候体会原文和例句的逻辑关联。

Personal Review

It is wrong to see writing errors as chiefly careless, however. In hindsight, writers acknowledge that they have intentionally chosen certain words to state their opinions. The aims were laudable, but the implemention was proving a disaster. Judging from this live review session, I think that errors often arose out of negligence, incompetence or misconception. 

Accidental nor not, they tends to divide learners into two camps. The active case is that stumbling blocks may cause temporary hardships but will ultimately turn into stepping stones. The pessimists argue that without timely and appropriate feedback, it is far-fetched to suggest that practice makes perfect. 

As a result, finding and correcting errors under proper guidance can play a useful role as a reminder: the literary world is full of pitfalls trying to hobble our progress. To win the uphill battle of writing, we need to take errors as instructive tools.