最喜欢的季节
2017-10-10 本文已影响0人
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小天同学学校的英语课每周会有一次写作练习,老师给一个主题,然后学生自由写作,老师批改的时候不会指出任何语法或者单词错误,只针对内容做一个回应,一般都是表扬的句子。他们貌似更看重表达出自己的观点,至于细节错误则交给时间去处理。小天同学局限于词汇量储备不够,英语母语的同学能写一页A4纸,她现在只能写半页。
在国内只上过网络课,没上过实体的英语培训班,为了更快地跟上班级课程进度,小天同学在这里的培训机构报了一对一的课程,主要内容是口语和写作。老师很认真,擅长和孩子聊天,给小天同学讲了写一般夹叙夹议文章的套路:提出观点,列举三个辅助观点的内容,然后分别展开增加细节,最后来个总结。 以下是小天同学依据套路写出的作文,我没有学校老师的定力,忍不住要她改正拼写和语法错误,然后让她自己输入Word,再通过Word检查一下有没有大的问题。以下是经过修改的作文内容,表达了她最喜欢的季节是秋天。My Favourite Season
In autumn, the kids go to school again. Some fruits are ready to be picked. My favourite season is autumn, because the leaves change colours, the weather is cool and we have the Mid-Autumn Festival in China. I pretty enjoy autumn. It is the best season. I like autumn best because the leaves change colours. When the leaves change into red, yellow and orange, oh and burgundy, they are very beautiful. When the leaves fall down, it looks like butterfly flying in the sky. And the most amazing part is I can make art with the leaves. I like autumn because the weather is cool. I mean, the sun is still shiny, but the weather is not like summer, too hot, not like winter, too cold that you just want to stay at your warm little bed. It’s just very comfortable. I can go hiking, or have a picnic with my family in a park. I like autumn because we have the Mid-Autumn Festival in China. That means no school for a day, and I can go see my grandma, I very miss her. The most interesting part is, my mom and I always make mooncakes at home, they are very delicious, you should try one. That's the three reasons that I think autumn is the best season. Do you like autumn?
中文、图片:老妖同学英文:小天同学 最喜欢的季节