哇,这糖果太好吃

2021-05-17  本文已影响0人  非夷非惠

                 

              在《查理和巧克力工厂》的第13页,作者第一次借 Grandpa Joe的口描绘出了世界上最好吃的糖果,调动起了大家所有的感官。比某些巧克力广告里的语言不知道丰富了多少,更重要的是,绝不重复。

              从味觉到视觉到触觉,互相交融又不重复,还能进行动态的变化。

         Mr Willy Wonka can make marshmallows that taste of violets, and rich caramels that change colour every ten seconds as you suck them, and little feathery sweets that melt away deliciously the moment you put them between your lips.

              紫罗兰口味的棉花糖,

              很稠的焦糖,你在吸吮焦糖的时候,焦糖每十秒变化一次颜色,

              羽毛状的小糖果,你一放进嘴里,就融化了,留下满口芬芳和美味

              每种糖果都有自己的独到之处,棉花糖胜在口感,焦糖胜在颜色的变化,小糖果胜在外形和触觉感受;至于在嘴里的存留时间,小糖果最短,焦糖长一些,棉花糖最长。

              但是,如果有人很信息化地给你这些糖果,只怕你未必会留下深刻的印象。它们之所以会让你经久难忘,乃是作者重新组织了语言的顺序。

        拆开来,就变成这样的短句。

                       Mr WillyWonka can make marshmallows that taste of violets.

                            Mr Willy Wonka can make rich caramelsthat change colour every ten seconds as you suck them.

                   Mr Willy Wonka can make little featherysweets that melt away deliciously the moment you put them between your lips.

               所有的感觉是分开的,感觉一分开,糖果的魅力就少一分。

           变成长句之后,糖果的魅力就增加了。

                 Mr Willy Wonka can make marshmallows that taste of violets, and rich caramels that change colour every ten seconds as you suck them, and little feathery sweets that melt away deliciously the moment you put them between your lips.

                  所有的语言,都需要朗读,尤其是儿童文学中的语言。

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