复盘Justin直播课《我是怎样写一篇英文随笔的》

2018-09-23  本文已影响0人  欢子爷

复盘原则:做不到全盘吸收,抓取自己最需要的知识点。

一.文章结构和框架

不管是写文章还是读文章,都要先关注这么几个要素:标题,摘要,首尾段,以及每段主题句。

从我的学习经历来看,这个逻辑在雅思托福的文章很适用,这次课程也证明了这个思路也适用于个人的英文写作。

此外,写文章思路并不是线性的,思考和思路总是需要整理,有一个过程,才最终呈现出一个线性的段落。

需要背诵的主题句

1)Luckin comes prepared.

2)What truly sets Luckin apart from Starbucks is its delivery-focused approach.

3)Luckin’s genes vary entirely from Lyan’s as well as Starbucks’.

4)Luckin’s growing fan base is thanks also to its careful pick of spokespeople.

二. 句子的创作

当我们确定了一个句子要表达的意思之后,为了让句子更出彩,可以问自己2个问题:

1. 怎么写会更有趣,更好玩?                       

文章中很多词汇的选择都是斟酌过的。比如, viral & rival ;picky & pick;speed & scale 等。 大声读出来,用耳朵写句子。比如文章最后一段的遣词造句,读起来很悦耳。

这个目标更高阶,需要长期积累才能有灵感迸发。目前不是我的重心。

2. 如何调动自己的消极词汇,把认识但在冬眠的词变成自己能准确使用的积极词汇?   

这一点是我这一年的重心。阅读文章中认识的词不少,但是写起文章来,能够调兵遣将的词汇少得可怜。

懒人如我的解决方法:内化很多常见词汇的灵活运用。珍惜每日一练的单词训练。

本篇文章中,我需要转换为积极词汇的名单:

动词

-Its 344 stores dotted 13 cities,with Beijing topping the list.

(“有”: scatter,spread,distribute)

-…position itself first as a coffee delivery brand.

-U automatically qualify for a free redeem card on Luckin.

-Characterize

-Monetize

-Last

-Outcompete

-X ensures a persistently referral rate.

-(picutred)— 如图所示

-Roll out(launch)its own coffee brand.

-Justify… 值(得)…

名词

-wave:1. make waves 2. feel a wave of

-the uncontested go-to spot

-burn rate

-hallmark

-user acquisition and store additions

形容词

-A is comparable to B

-drinkbale coffee

-pricy

-picky about quality/ picky eater

-award-winning actors

-likable actors

-premature (+ly)

-delivery-focused approach

-its stated/intended/ goal

      expressed will

副词 well

-the real cost may well be between 18-25. (表 很有可能)


口语表达

-Uncontested go-to spot
-Spokespeople
-Invite link
-Niche market
-premium membership card
-High-class club


-(Heavy) coffee drinkers
- caffeine-dependent
-Coffee enthusiasts
-Starbucks goers/users-(loyal) fans
-Luckin lovers
-Picky customers


-Referral rate
-Nationwide-statewide-citywide
-Through and through
-..., all sign of high caliber.
-Fill the void

-grow by word of mouth

-Fans were said to be lukewarm about it.

-A day doesn’t really start until I
drink an Americano.


关于写句子的几点新认识:

1. 一句话的黄金位子是头+尾

以前我只注意到了头,这次被提醒了:尾。终于明白了这种句式的用意:

例句:Today,however,a less familiar name may come up more often as it is barging into the coffee retail market in China:Luckin.

2. 短句的力量:强调和概述

几个段落中间的漂亮的短句

1)It boasts three major highlights.

2)Freshness serves a similar purpose.

3)Fans were said to be luckwarm about it.

4)only time will tell.

本次课在最后的讨论环节,有位朋友提出来副词的问题,感觉受益很大,刷新了我的认知。以前总以为要积累和运用副词来限定动作和程度状况,

这次明白了:努力的方向应该是更精准地使用具体的Verb。比如,用yell 代替 shout loudly.

复盘第一篇。愿我这一年 能有始有终。

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