2019年8月写作直播反馈（一）

自现象级英语

守破离，先要守住

每周一段46：微软市值超过苹果

没有问题的句子

the rise of sth 有时代特征

没问题的句子，用词diction准确 没问题的句子 拼写更正subscription the rise of new energy carmaking也可以

has-been 过气的人或事物

更正：主语不能是人，应改为商家等

expats=foreigners 外国人 expat community 外国人社区

不恰当的句子，English skills没有时代性
the rise of financing 本身不具有时代性

拼写derived 改为derided

仿写的例句 deceptively simple，感觉容易实际难，解决句式独有的implication和assumption

每周一段47 酷暑难耐

作者是青岛人 更正拼写swathes

加一句来stretch your mind

即便有，但还是 逻辑关系存疑

改写：Despite the wide coverage/ around-the-clock coverage, the implications of chaos across Hong Kong are often overlooked or underplayed.

逻辑不通：热切的渴望，动机 不是我写的，糖果写的

admonitions 告诫，numerous对应excessive，用词word choice好

well-known truism 道理再简单不过

原文 更正

before 的用法：地道

threw the whole country into debate

spectacular : 吸引眼球，惊心动魄 eye-catching

road accidents, road collisions 同义替换

最后一句：双关 pile-up 多车相撞，交通事故 piled up news 新闻不断

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