一天重写一篇新概念英语

NCE-2 7 Too late

2016-12-22  本文已影响1人  愿景力

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Lesson 7 Too late 为时太晚

The plane was late and detectives were waiting at the airport all morning. They were expecting a valuable parcel of diamond from South Africa. A few hours earlier, someone had told the police that thieves would try to steal the diamonds. When the plane arrived, some of the detectives were waiting inside the main building while others were waiting on the airfield. Two men took the parcel off the plane and carried it into the Customs House. While two detectives were keeping guard at the door, two others opened the parcel. To their surprise, the precious parcel was full of stones and sand!

From One Of The Detectives's View:

Last Wednesday, police station were reported that thieves would try to steal a valuable parcel of diamonds from South Africa. A few hours later, we were ordered to go to the airport to prevent it from happening. The plane we 'were waiting'[=> waited 170119] was late, so we were waiting there 'for the whole morning'[=> all morning]. When the plane arrived, some of my colleagues were waiting inside the main building while others were waiting on the airfield. Two man[=> men 170119] took the parcel off the plane and entered[=> carried it] into the Customs House. Then,[=> While] two of my colleagues guarded[=> were keeping guard] on the door and[=> ,] two others opened the parcel. To our surprise, the precious parcel was full of stones and sand.

Knowledges

今天这篇以一个侦探的角度, 描写从接收任务到执行任务的过程.

From the Parcel's Owner's View:

Last month, I went to South Africa and spent two billion on 'diamonds'[a parcel of diamonds]. I put the diamonds into a secure[=> anti-theft] suitcase and entrusted an international transport company to take it to this city.

The suitcase were arranged to be arrived yesterday and[=> but 170119] I received an anonymous phone call that thieves would try to steal the diamonds before the plane which my diamon were in took off.

[这句太复杂, 会造成误解. 是我在飞机起飞前接到电话呢, 还是飞机起飞前东西会被偷呢? 170119]
The suitcase were arranged to be arrived yesterday. But before the plane in which my diamonds were took off, an anonymous phone call told me that thieves would try to steal them.

I was alarmed[=> worried 170119 感觉 alarmed 用在之前受过惊的事情比较好] and nervous so I notice[=> noticed 170119] the police' and'[=> . Then 170119 直接断句更好] about twenty detectives were appointed to prevent the diamonds from being stolen. The detectives were waiting in and around the airport 'in the whole'[=> all] morning because 'the plane was late'[=> the delay of the fright]. Two men took the suitcase off the plane and entered[=> carried it] into the Customs House when[=> after] the plane arrived. Then[=> While] two detectives 'guarded'[=> stood guard on 170119] the door and[=> ,] two others opened ''[=> the] parcel. To 'their'[=> all our] surprise, the precious diamonds were replaced with stones and sand.

Knowledges

170119

Remembers

只记录一两条觉得最有用的

(作文时间: 2016年12月20日, 耗时: 200分钟)

30天后修改意见

(修改时间: 2017-01-19, 耗时: 25 分钟)

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