雅思大作文003–老建筑应该被拆除吗？（2017年12月2日真题

雅思大作文003–老建筑应该被拆除吗？（2017年12月2日真题。文末附评改意见及评改稿）

一、英文原题：People think that old buildings should be knocked down and give way to the new buildings. Do you agree or disagree? How important are old buildings to us?

二、题目解析：这是一道观点型的政策类作文题目。关键词是“老建筑”、“拆除”及其“重要性”。围绕着“老建筑”这个关键词，我想到了名人故居、名胜古迹、城中村的房子；针对“拆除”的原因我想到了危房、城市改造、经济发展；“重要性”我想到了教育、经济发展的需要、物质文化遗产的保护、文化特色旅游项目的开发和建设。我的立场是老建筑尤其历史、文化、经济价值，应该根据它们的具体情况来决定是否需要保留或拆除。写作思路打算用四段论，先弊后利的方法。

三、正文撰写：

开头：

In the process of urbanization, there are usually a suite of thorny issues needing to be addressed. Among them, whether we should demolish old buildings and give way to new ones. People have mixed feelings towards this problem. In my belief, we should remove those old buildings that are risky and have little value while preserve the ones that have historical, cultural and economic interests.

主体 1:

On the one hand, some old buildings have become very dangerous because they were built many years ago and have past their lifespan. If we still keep them in our neighborhood, they would pose a lot of hidden threats to the city residents. Besides, with the development of the cities, the former residential apartment blocks have failed to meet the need of increasing number of city dwellers, therefore, we need to remove the old shanty towns and make room for new and more modern city infrastructure.

主体 2:

On the other hand, some historical buildings are maintained in good condition and possess high historical, cultural and economic value which should be well protected. For instance, the Chen Clan Temple in the city of Guangzhou in south China boasts in its long history of clan culture and exquisite carvings and decorations in modern China. Each year, thousands of visitors come to Guangzhou to sightsee this historical building cluster and help the municipal government gain an attractive sum of revenue. For another example, the People’s Liberation Monument of the City of Chongqing marks the victory of Anti-Japanese War by the Chinese people 78 years old. This historical site has also become the symbol of Chongqing as a war time capital of Nationalist China in the past. Hence, old buildings like this one owns high educational and cultural values and comprising the collective memory of a city dwellers or even a whole nation which undoubtedly needing to be preserved.

结尾：

In summary, in order to best balance the benefits and drawbacks of historical buildings, we should spare no efforts to preserve those with educational, cultural and economic values and do away with the ones which have exceed their quality self life and those old ones which hinder the development of the modern city.

四、写后反思

这篇习作我看了一下时间，从构思到撰写大概耗时40来分钟。基本一气呵成，习作创作期间没有查过任何词典，尽量模拟考试状态。习作完成后自己觉得基本满意，但用词方面还是觉得有点欠缺，看来文辞、表达的积累还需加强。现在小憩一下，回头研读唐伟胜老师范文进行评改。回头再见各位小伙伴。

五、范文研读及评改

刚才我用了几分钟的时间研读了一下唐伟胜老师的同题目雅思范文，和往常一样发现了许多值得我学习的亮点，在此借小文一角分享给大家。

首先，唐老师的范文和我的思路一样，使用了先抑后扬的平衡式写法。其次，在素材方面唐老师使用了老房子的宜居问题、便捷问题和安全问题来论证它们的弊端；用了老房子的历史文化价值，并用北京颐和园皇家园林的例子来论证它们的优势，论点鲜明、论据充分、论证有力。在用词用句方面，唐老师使用的“a host of questions”、 “pull down”、“replace with”、“make a detour”、“deserve”和“We all need a memory of our past. Many old buildings do have historical and cultural values which tells us who we were.”等好词好句非常值得我学习。

对于我本人一早撰写的习作中有一个广州陈家祠的例证还需再查一下资料进行修改和充实，过一会我会用手机上网做一点搜索，在下面的修改稿中我会把搜索结果充实到习作中。

六、以下修改稿与大家共享：

开头：

In the process of urbanization, there are usually a suite of thorny issues needing to be addressed. Among them, whether we should demolish old buildings and give way to new ones. People have mixed feelings towards this problem. In my belief, we should remove those old buildings that are risky and have little value while preserve the ones that have historical, cultural and economic significance.

主体 1:

On the one hand, some old buildings have become very dangerous because they were built many years ago and have past their lifespan. If we still keep them in our neighborhood, they would collapse at anytime and pose a lot of hidden threats to the city residents. Besides, with the development of the cities, the former residential apartment blocks have failed to meet the need of increasing number of city dwellers, therefore, we need to pull down the old shanty towns and make room for new and more modern city infrastructure.

主体 2:

On the other hand, some historical buildings are maintained in good condition and possess high historical, cultural and economic value which should be well protected. For instance, the Chen Clan Ancestral Temple built to prepare the journors of 72 Chen clans for the imperial examination in the late 20th century in the Qing Dynasty in contemporary China in the city of Guangzhou in south China boasts in its long history of clan culture and exquisite wood carvings , pottery artifacts, unique tranditional architectural style and decorations in modern China. Each year, thousands of visitors home and abroad come to Guangzhou to sightsee this historical building complex and help the municipal government garner an attractive sum of revenue. For another example, the People’s Liberation Monument of the City of Chongqing marks the victory of Anti-Japanese War by the Chinese people 78 years old. This historical site has also become the symbol of Chongqing as a war time capital of Nationalist China in the past. Hence, old buildings like this one owns high educational and cultural values and comprising the collective memory of a city dwellers or even a whole nation which undoubtedly needing to be preserved.

结尾：

In summary, in order to best balance the benefits and drawbacks of historical buildings, we should spare no efforts to preserve those with educational, cultural and economic values reminding us of our past and do away with the ones which have exceed their quality self life and those old ones which hinder the development of the modern city.