我喜欢你静止

试着翻译一下聂鲁达的 I like you to be still《我喜欢你静止》。

聂鲁达的原诗是西班牙文，西语到英语已不可能百分之百精确，从英文再翻成中文， 必定又会损失原文的一些韵味。我不懂西文，单从英文看，我觉得网上的一些翻译对一些词的拿捏不准，当然，整体上大致不会破坏诗的意境。

以下是我个人的理解：

Still的本意是不动的意思，而不仅仅是寂静或者沉默，前者是视觉感受，后者是听觉，这种静和止的状态，才会带来“你不在这里”的感觉；

absent也不是消失的意思，消失了的状态是没人知道她在哪里，而这里想要表达的是作者“我”和“她”情感上的距离，她“不在这里”，而是在“远处”。之所以有这样的感觉，是因为作者的爱和表述得不到对方的回应，她能够听到也能感受到作者，但没有给出任何反应，作者才会发出“我的声音无法触及你”的感叹，就好像顾城“你看我时很远，你看云时很近“ 的那种咫尺天涯的无奈。

I like for you to be still: it is as though you were absent

我喜欢你静止：就好像你不在这里   

and you hear me from far away and my voice does not touch you                               

你在远处聆听我，而我的声音无法触及你

It seems as though your eyes had flown away

你的眼神飞逝

and it seems that a kiss had sealed your mouth

仿佛一个吻，缄封了你的双唇

As all things are filled with my soul

就像万物充盈着我的灵魂

you emerge from the things, filled with my soul

你带着我的灵魂，从万物中浮现

You are like my soul, a butterfly of dream

你就像我的灵魂，一只梦想的蝴蝶

and you are like the word Melancholy

你就像忧愁这个词语

I like for you to be still, and you seem far away

我喜欢你静止，仿佛你很遥远

It sounds as though you were lamenting, a butterfly cooing like a dove

听上去你似乎在叹息，如鸽子般咕鸣的蝴蝶

And you hear me from far away, and my voice does not reach you:

你在远处聆听我，而我的声音无法触及你:

Let me come to be still in your silence

就让我在你的沉默中静止

And let me talk to you with your silence

让我用你的沉默与你交谈

that is bright as a lamp, simple as a ring

灯一样明亮，指环一样简单

You are like the night, with its stillness and constellations

你宛如夜晚，带着静谧和星际

Your silence is that of a star, as remote and candid

你沉默如星辰，深邃而又坦诚

I like for you to be still: it is as though you were absent

我喜欢你静止：就好像你不在这里

distant and full of sorrow, as though you had died,

远远地，你充满着忧伤，如同已经死去

One word then, one smile, is enough

但一个词，一个微笑，我已心满意足

And I am happy, happy that it's not true.

我会很高兴，高兴这并不是真的。