10–5: WRITING ABOUT AN AWKWARD S

题目

Write about an awkward situation. You can write about a  personal experience or something that happened to someone you know. Try to be  as descriptive as possible, and create a clear picture for your reader.

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Please make sure that you read the question carefully and  check the word limit before you start answering. You have been asked to write  about a personal experience or something that happened to someone you know.  You need not describe the Knight Valley. I have corrected only within the  given word limit. Please note. To talk about something in general, put the  nouns in the plural form and do not use the definite article 'the'. Examples,  mountains, seas... To talk about an action in the past, which is a finished  action, use the simple past tense. Put the main verbs as well as the 'be  verbs' in the past tense. Another clue is, (ago, yesterday, last week, last  month, last year etc…+ simple past tense). Example, it was... Looking forward  to reading your next piece of writing.

“A true man loves the mountains; and a wise man loves the  sea.” Chinese prefer mountains to seas, climbing to the top, soaring high,  letting breeze comb through hair. On Valentine’s Day, I brought my date to  enjoy a day out in Knight Valley, a theme park in east mountain area of  Shenzhen. It was a pleasant day of early spring. The park unrolls from  seaside to hillside and from foothills to the hilltop, a paradise on earth  bathing in sunshine, with birds singing and chatting in trees and flowers  tipsily tossing in breezes. Two shades of white clouds stay together and move  slowly against the vast clear blue sky, perfectly presenting lovers’ mood  under them. A day with great visibility, people love to overlook the sea from  the top. With an altitude of 480m, Yunding Sightseeing Area of Knight Valley  is the best viewing deck overlooking the whole open seashore. Among many  projects is the Peak Platform, a U-shape corridor with transparent floor  extending beyond the cliff. Instead of climbing hill trails, we chose  cable-way. Plumes of mist, powered by mountain wind, tapping the ascending  cable-car, my girlfriend Linda was excited by the retreating seashore line  and the never-tired pursuing of sea-waves to the crowded beach. I couldn’t  help looking down, and then felt caught by a wave of nerves. While pretending  enjoying the view, I felt my palms sweating and found two hands holding the  seat firmly. Finally, we were on the top. Linda was capering ahead of me,  rushing to the Peak Platform, while I was lagging and hesitating behind. She  called me to take a portrait picture for her over there against the  magnificent vista. Treading on the transparent floor, I am shaking in my  shoes, sweating profusely; oh, my gosh; a thousand-foot precipice is under my  feet! Linda realized something and rushed back to me. “Is this called  acrophobia?” I was speechless for a while, admitting that fear of heights  knocked into my weak point, and speculating, “Have I screwed up the date? How  awkward I am!”

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