Part One    讲解笔记

1. in urgent need of help

2. all those levels of meanings can’t be packed into one sentence 一句话说尽所有意思

3. Your prominent accomplishments and expertise in the fields of ···has made you an icon-like figure among ···  （对他人成就的赞誉）

4. I am wondering if I could get some advice from you concerning this career choice.（表明想要征询建议的意愿）

5. I do understand that you have a very busy schedule, hence even a simple 10-15 minute talk over coffee would be of great help to me. What do you say, 你认为怎么样 we meet up sometime in between 11 to 2 on Thursday or Friday next week at the ground-floor Starbucks in your building? Thank you in advance for your time and your consideration. （记住：最后客套语包含的意思不要和上文提过的重复）

6. 篇幅：至少八句话

7. 关于内容

选题：多为自己的真实需求服务，找到适合自己行业以及发展阶段的应用。

内容：多说与对方相关的题目，少表达自己的背景和经历。

安妮名言：Self discipline is the core of any kind of excellence.

                   Don't take brainless formulas as blessing.

                   商函就记住平淡平淡平淡无奇 Don't aim to raise eyebrows Or drop any jaws.

8. lack of respect calling yourself in a pit 坑 needing  to be dug out

dig sb/ sth↔'out (of sth)

1  to remove sb/ sth from somewhere by digging the ground around them or it 挖掘出

More than a dozen people were dug out of the avalanche alive.十多个埋在雪崩下的人活着被挖了出来。

2   to find sth that has been hidden or forgotten for a long time 找出，发掘，发现（藏着的或被遗忘的东西）

I went to the attic and dug out Grandad's medals.我到阁楼里发现了祖父的勋章

ˌdig 'in (informal)

1  used to tell sb to start to eat 开始吃吧

Help yourselves, everybody! Dig in! 请大家随意，开始吃吧！

2  to wait, or deal with a difficult situation, with great patience 耐心等待；忍耐；忍受

There is nothing we can do except dig in and wait. 我们除了耐心等待别无他法。

ˌdig sth↔'in

1  to mix soil with another substance by digging the two substances together （把…）掺进土中，混入土壤

The manure should be well dug in.肥料应均匀地混入土壤。

2  to push sth into sth else （把…）戳进，插入

He dug his fork into the steak. 他把餐叉叉进牛排。

9. new words:

impertinent  =rude

meek  谦恭的 温顺的

10. That would piss off even your best friend.

ˌpiss sb↔'off    to make sb annoyed or bored 使生气；使厌烦

Her attitude really pisses me off. 她的态度让我厌烦极了。

I'm pissed off with the way they've treated me. 我讨厌他们那样对待我。

ˌpiss 'off(especially BrE) (usually used in orders 通常用于命令) to go away 走开

Why don't you just piss off and leave me alone?你就不能滚开，让我清静清静？

11.Don't make people feel that you think so high of yourself while not so much of some others.

相当于you do not think high of

12. 笃师范文

Sample 1- by Annie  求介绍 

On 10/16/14 7:55 PM, Annie Qu wrote:

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Hi Iris,

Hope this message finds you doing very well. It has been a while since we met last time! How are you doing? I see you now work for a whole different set of organizations now, congratulations on the new development. I am just touching base, also wondering if you could introduce me to Warren Michelow as I am seeking a career in data science and he works as a data scientist at Boeing Canada. It would be a great networking opportunity for me. Thank you so much for your time.

Warmest regards,

Annie Qu

p.s. I don’t think I have ever conveyed adequately my gratitude in your mentorship and leadership in bringing me along on several of your research projects while we worked together at the BCCEWH. Those experiences taught me much about your character and your professionalism, well beyond the subject matter knowledge even.对合作过的收信人的评价赞扬 Would love to have coffee with you sometimes if you have 20 minutes. I can drop by 顺便到访 your main office (OrionHealth?) at a time that works better for you.

Sample 2–By Annie  求职

Dear Mr. Delamar,

First of all, congratulations on Stockwell Day's joining as the executive chairman of Pacific Future Energy. I have been following the news and your business charter really intrigued me. I am aVancouver local with a background in Environmental Engineering 说自己的专业可以这么表达, actuarial sciences 精算学 and non-profit humanity programs, hence I am quite excited about your company's vision to build a green oil refinery on the BC coast, it makes a solid economic case and also an environmentally sustainable one, let alone its brilliant upfront consideration of collaboration with the First Nations. 对对方公司实绩的赞美

I am wondering if I could have a 10-15 minute talk with you to discuss the possibility of me joining your team in the capacity of 以···身份（职位）行事 a business analyst 面谈的内容要说到位. I dream to work for an energy start-up with which I wholeheartedly share the vision. I believe the company could really use a bilingual generalist with strong business acumen 敏锐 considering your main target buyer of the product is China.（毛遂自荐双语人才，可以背下来）

Would it be a good time for you that I come by your office tomorrow morning at around 11:30am? I would also really appreciate the opportunity to know more details of the company's business plan.

Sincerely,

Annie

SAMPLE EMAIL CORRESPONDENCEfrom Georgetown.edu

Below is a sample e-mail that you might write to an alumnus 男校友 to ask for an informational interview:

Dear Mr. Smith,

I found your name and contact information on Georgetown's Alumni Career Network. I am a rising junior in the College of Arts and Sciences, and hope to pursue a career in secondary education upon graduation. Given that you have over five years of experience in this field, I would appreciate the chance to ask you a few questions about your career path and your experience in the public school system in Tennessee.

I realize that this time of year is likely a busy one for you.学习这一句过渡 I am hopeful that you would be willing to speak with me over the phone or via email at some point during the next two weeks. Please let me know if you are able to talk with me and if so what method of communication would be preferable.

Thank you very much in advance for your time and insight.

Sincerely,

Susan Braunlin

Part Two    修改

1. 修改前反思

优点：开门见山、行文不啰嗦（落笔前考虑了读者角度）

缺点：（1）不具体（没说明白咨询哪方面信息；为什么肯定收信人了解这些信息，这里适情增加对收信人的恭维），即表明来意不够充分（2）介绍人与收信人的关系 可以简单提醒写出来

2. 修改后

Dear Mr. Smith,

I found your email address by my college best friend your daughter Sarah Jones, who is my college classmate and told me that you are an expert in the field of architecture.  I am an architect graduated from OSU, have had been working in P Company since 2012 until my family moved to New York City last week. Due to the fact that my family has prepared for moving  to New York, I want to find a new job there. I am looking for a job from architecture design offices here and  wondering if I could get some advice from you concerning this career choice.

Could I have this opportunity to talk with you? Would you prefer coffee near your office or a phone call, please?

Thank you very much in advance for your time and insight.

Sincerely,

Sophie Allen