剑10test1task2范文分析

It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

官方范文：

　One important stage in a child's growth is certainly the development of a conscience, which is linked to the ability to tell right from wrong. This skill comes with time and good parenting, and my firm conviction is that punishment does not have much of a role to play in this. Therefore I have to disagree almost entirely with the given statement.

　　To some extent the question depends on the age of the child. To punish a very young child is both wrong and foolish, as an infant will not understand what is happening or why he or she is being punished. Once the age of reason is reached however, a child can be rewarded for good behaviour and discouraged from bad. This kind but firm approach will achieve more than harsh punishments, which might entail many negative consequences unintended by the parents.（两种方法对比）

　　To help a child learn the difference between right and wrong, teachers and parents should firstly provide good role modelling in their own behavior. After that, if sanctions are needed, the punishment should not be of a physical nature, as that merely sends the message that it is acceptable for larger people to hit smaller ones- an outcome which may well result in the child starting to bully others. Nor should the punishment be in any way cruel.

　　Rather, teachers and parents can use a variety of methods to discipline their young charges, such as detention, withdrawal of privileges, and time-out. Making the punishment fit the crime is a useful notion, which would see children being made to pick up rubbish they have dropped, clean up graffiti they have drawn, or apologize to someone they have hurt. In these ways responsibility is developed in the child, which leads to much better future behaviour than does punishment.

积累：

词 

a physical type of punishment , ban corporal punishment, verbal abuse, discipline a child, being disciplined, be rewarded for good behaviour and discouraged from bad, harsh punishments, discipline their young charges, detention, withdrawal of privileges,time-out, misbehaving children

provide good role modelling in their own behavior，distinguish between right and wrong, distinguish right from wrong, tell right from wrong, Learn the difference between right and wrong.

parent-child relationship

be liable to be victims, fall victim to punishment,assertiveness training自信心的训练

send the messages,clean up graffiti, Revise it in the light of experience.

the age of reason,sanctions will be employed

原因

be partly attributed to the common counterproductive approach to…

certain approaches to … can be useful in changing the behavior of… without…, although other sanctions may be needed for…

影响

negative side effects, dark sides

Time-outs are a form of discipline used by parents to modify their children's behavior. It usually involves sending children to a quiet space or quiet corner. The aim is for children to reflect on their behavior. Scientists have disagreed about the effectiveness of this strategy

句 

1.The skill comes with time with good parenting.

2.After that, if sanctions are needed, the punishment should not be of a physical nature， as that merely sends the message that it is acceptable for larger people to hit smaller ones- an outcome which may well result in the child starting to bully others.break up conflicts A worthwhile objective

条件状语从句+as原因状语从句+2同位语从句

3. Nor should the punishment be in any way cruel.

4. xxx is a useful notion, which would seems …

Making the punishment fit the crime is a useful notion, which would see children being made to pick up rubbish they have dropped, clean up graffiti they have drawn , or apologize to someone they have hurt.

5. In these ways responsibility is developed in the child, which leads to much better future behavior than does punishment.

6. Bullying can take a variety of forms, from the verbal— being taunted or called hurtful names—to the physical —being kicked or shoved— as well as indirect forms such as being excluded from social groups.

7.xxx is clearly unpleasant, and make the child experiencing it feel unworthy and depressed. In extreme cases it can even lead to suicide, though this is thankfully rare.

Victimized pupils are more likely to experience difficulties with interpersonal relationships as adults, while children who persistently bully are more likely to grow up to be physically violent and convinced of anti-social offences.

8.There are some alarming claims that time-outs can damage the parent-child relationship and negatively affect emotional health, but the research simply doesn't support those claims.

框架

一、

（1）背景句:

One important stage in a child's growth is certainly the development of a conscience, which is linked to the ability to tell right from wrong.

（2）观点句:

My firm conviction is that xxx does (not )have much of a role to play in this. Therefore I have to disagree/agree almost entirely with the given statement.

My firm conviction is that punishment does not have much of a role to play in this. Therefore I have to disagree almost entirely with the given statement.

possess the conviction that

二、解释处罚与年龄有关

（1）观点 To some extent the question depends on …

To some extent the question depends on the age of the child.

（2）To … is wrong and foolish, as+解释原因

（3）This kind but firm approach will achieve more than …， which might entail many negative consequences unintended by …（比较+后者造成消极影响）

This kind but firm approach will achieve more than harsh punishments, which might entail many negative consequences unintended by the parents.

三、父母做榜样+体罚的后果、坏处

provide good role modelling, 体罚坏处:bully others，方式cruel

观点:

To help a child learn the difference between right and wrong， teachers and parents should firstly provide good role modelling in their own behavior.

四、具体惩罚措施

（1）观点+例子

Rather, teachers and parents can use a variety of methods to discipline their young charges, such as detention, withdrawal of privileges，and time-out.

具体化

（2）作用

In these ways responsibility is developed in the child, which leads to much better future behavior than does punishment.