雅思小作文原创范文001—2016年剑11真题1
雅思小作文原创范文001—2016年剑11真题1
一、审题
这是一道饼图的题型，要求考生选择、报告和比较世界六个地区用水情况的主要特点。我的总体思路是首先改述题目，之后进行最大值和最小值的大趋势比较和具体分项的国别情况对比，最后总结全文，简略讨论一下原因、对策或未来发展趋势。
二、正文
The pie charts set compares six regions worldwide in their proportions of the use of water for three spheres-industry, agriculture and household.
It can be seen evidently that agriculture takes up nearly three quarters of overall water use and is the greatest consumer of water; while only about one tenth of water is attributed to household use which occupies the least of the proportion.
In terms of percentages of industrial, agricultural and domestic water consumption, North America and Europe are very similar, accounting for about half, one third and one seventh respectively. In contrast, the figure in Africa, Central America and South East Asia is more or less the same with agricultural sector consumes an overwhelming majority of water use which takes up four fifths of overall water consumption. In terms of domestic water the three regions almost equal in its use with South East Asia consumes a little bit higher amount of industrial water compared with the other two areas.
In summary, North America and Europe lead the other four regions in the use of industrial water while the ratio of the other four areas’ agricultural water use dominates the chart. With the industrialization of the less developed places, it is predicted that the industrial water use is likely to go up in the days to come.
三、范文评析
本篇范文在雅思小作文图表题的三大核心要求—客观性、准确性和详尽性方面都做得比较到位。范文首段使用地道的学术英语语言对题目进行了改述；主体第二段从总体上就六大地区工农业及家庭用水情况进行了最大和最小的两极比较；主体第三段根据饼图信息的相似性对六大地区进行重组，分别阐述了北美、欧洲工业发达地区以及南美、非洲、东亚和东南亚农业为主的区域的用水特征。尾段笔者总结全文并对未来发展的一个明显趋势做出了预测。
本范文语言使用的亮点有一下几处与大家分享：
1、占据、占有的多种英文表达：
occupy; take up; account for
2、表示比例的英文用法：
percentage; proportion; ratio
3、地道的学术英语句型：
A. It can be seen evidently that agriculture takes up nearly three quarters of overall water use and is the greatest consumer of water...
B....it is predicted that the industrial water use is likely to go up in the days to come.
