DAY3 - A16453 - 商业写作3

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Dear XXX,

I am a postgraduate applying the Master of Marketing of Cityu Hongkong. My application number is 549. It has been 5 months since I submitted my taught postgraduate program. Since a few students received results, I am eager to know if there has been any update regarding my application. As I mentioned in my application, I do consider the program quite an interesting challenge and it is definitely top on my list. As of now, a couple other universities have been responding to me based on my applications submitted. It would be very helpful to know whether I can get the interview opportunity and study further in Cityu. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Much appreciation for your kind consideration and your time.

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I am a postgraduate in SCAU. Last year, I applied the Master of Marketing of Cityu, Hong Kong. It was about 5 months ago but my application result is under review. I learn that the university prefer students who apply earlier.I am eager to know if there are any updates regarding my application. As I mentioned in my application, I do consider the program quite an interesting challenge and it is definitely top on my list. I hope to become a student in Cityu and continue my study in Hong Kong. Looking forward to hearing back from you.Thanks for your time.

Best wishes,

Leah