张培基英译中散文选 《梦》巴金 翻译笔记

…我那时不会知道我是在梦中…

I was unaware that I was in a dream.

“不知道”用的 “I was unware that”而非I don’t know

…武戏…

The fighting scents of a Peking opera ,简单两个字很详细地翻译出来了。

…然而睁开眼睛，我只是一个人…

“我只是一个人”译为I found that I was all by myself而不是 I was alone/lonely.

…没有笑，没有话语…

No more smile, no more chitchat.

“没有”一词用的no more,类似的还有：“没有你，没有你的微笑”译为“You and your smile were no more.”

…漆黑的空间…

In the pitch darkness.

而不是 in the dark space.

…侧耳倾听…

listen attentively.

…雨声继续着…

就是“雨继续下”的意思，译为 The rain continued to fall.

…在你的庇荫下…

“庇荫”就是保护➡️翅膀

译为under your wing.